Writing-Marking

WALT use the correct structure and language to write an explanation text.But yesterday we had to mark and score the piece of writing below.Below the writing is my scores for the writing and why.

Tautoro school is a special place for my community. It is about 7 kilometers from the main town

of Kaikohe and is surrounded by nature, gardens, paddocks and volcanic rock. The marae just

over the fence, is a special place for the school community where our people gather for many

hui and whanau events. There is a small dairy a few metres along the road.

At Tautoro school all the kids have a sense of belonging through promoting and upholding our

waka hoe values, whakapapa and whakawhanaungatanga. Our whanau from Tautoro and surrounding
areas
like Kaikohe send their kids to our school knowing they will get a well

rounded education. Whanau like the school teaching staff who are very passionate about

supporting whanau and their tamariki in education and self determination.

A great thing about Tautoro school is that there are no distractions like the main streets or a

variety of shops where kids can roam and get in trouble. So our whanau know that their kids

will not have the bad influences that other kids may have in the main town.

All the kids at Tautoro school have a fantastic sports and PE teacher who has a lot of exciting

and enjoyable activities to help us stay fit and learn new skills. So kids don’t have to get bored. 

 As you can see, there are many reasons why our small country school in Tautoro is a very

special place to our community where our connections to whanau and learning are imperative. 

                        Score     Reasons why you have given this mark

Ideas	4	Because the paragraph has several Ideas that some information and one paragraph has a lot of information
Structure Language	5	Because this writing is well structured and also has a range of language features that fit the purpose well
Organisation	4	Because their ideas are organized properly but there is some missing pieces
Vocabulary	5	Because they use a variety of enhancing words and or phrases to give specific information and they choose eye catching words
Sentence Structure	5	They have written a variety of sentences which are grammatically correct. Some sentences are structured for effect to create dynamic.
Punctuation	5	They have used correct sentence punctuation,but they have not used any other punctuation besides( , .)
Spelling	4	They have spelt a few words that are well fitted in the story but they have not used any risk taking words.
Total	29	This has been a very very interesting story to read,but the conclusion was too short and there was no title

Word Of The Day

This is important so that we know how to spell the words provided and know the definition.

Recount

The nerve hadn’t kicked in yet, but there was something bubbling inside of many

of the students,the students of Tautoro school had been training hard 

for the passed event that happened on Wednesday.

‘What if I fall over at the start?What if I twist my ankle or something’ was all that was

playing in my head,as nervous as I was on the inside I remained cool to trick my fellow
competitors.While waiting a few friends of mine played I dare you,It was an eventful game but
then Mrs Paraha asked Marta,Manaaki-tia and I to entertain the juniors while waiting for our
time to run.Finally! It was our time to run.I started off by stretching to make sure that I wouldn’t
get a cramp!Then off we went.

I could feel the crisp air blowing against my face giving me cold chills,the soothing sound

of the trees swishing in the wind and the sound of crashing waves intrigued me.I bolted getting
some good distance on the others but I had a bad gut feeling ran it off thinking my nerves had
some sort of power that was hurting me or something,I didn’t want to stop I

have trained too hard to give up now!I was determined to run at least one lap.The slower

my speed became I got anxious what was happening?The more I ran the more it hurts,the words
give up weren’t in my vocabulary so as the warrior I was I finished at least one lap.

My second lap had gotten worse,it felt as the pain had traveled through my whole body.

So there was only one thing I could do,gi-give up I sighed in disappointment.

Now looking back at that day I think that maybe I could have tried harder?But in the state

I was in, I know that I couldn’t of.Why me?Why now? Was all I was thinking after the race

.I promise that next time I won’t give up so easily and I’ll fight back!Even though I didn’t win,
I’m able to redeem myself at Ohaeawai.

Word of the day

Analyse and Compare Box Plots

Box Plots

Maths

W.A.L.T:Analyse data by calculating the mean, median, mode and range.

Te Reo Maori-He Patai

W.A.L.T:Be able to ask and respond to questions in Te Reo Maori

Technology Wk1

Technology

Word Of The Day

W.A.L.T:Be able to spell a variety of words,but also be able to know the definition.

Writing

This week we have been learning about Narrative Writing,We  watched a video about a girl called Mara,had to write about her characteristics.WALT develop characters for a narrative story.

Mara is a self-less,kind-hearted,sweet,nice,ambitious,intelligent,help-ful yet curious,sometimes disappointed but that does not stop her from helping others as much as she can!I could see the hope through her big bulky glasses that took up most of her face,with bits of her brown hair hanging out from the front.

Ko te whanau heihei

W.A.L.T:Translate a Te reo Maori book,using our prior knowledge.